2011 年6月英语四级考试真题详细解析
Part I Writing
标准版
Doing Shopping Online
With the development of the Internet, shopping is no longer a tiring thing. Just click your
mouse to choose the articles you like, and the purchase is done. You don't even have to step out
of the room. It seems all easy and quick.
However, people's opinions vary on this trend. Some believe that on line shopping is time
and money saving. With plentiful selection options, they can buy whatever they like at any time
convenient. Still others insist that mis-purchasing alone is annoying enough, not to mention the
credibility of the sellers and the safety of their accounts.
In my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line shopping is beyond all doubts. In
the meantime, we must always bear in mind that certain traps do exist, so we'd better make sure
the sellers are trustworthy before buying. In addition, we should also guard ourselves from the
potential hackers who might steal our account information.
文章点评:
这是一篇“中等偏上”的学生作文。 本文先对网购热潮进行简介,引出全篇;接着
对网络购物的正反两方面进行对比;最后提出自己的看法结束全篇。整体看思路清晰,
逻辑严密,行文流畅,用语较为地道。
下面说一下这篇文章的有待提高之处:
1. 文章结构上,能看得出该同学试图采用议论文的“三段式”(提出问题、分析问
题、解决问题)。 但是,以“With the development of the Internet”为开首语,有些落入俗
套,有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意,应该能写出更好的句子。
2. 微观语言点方面,有些语句稍显啰嗦,比如 With plentiful selection options… 简化
成With plentiful selections… 更好,意思没有丝毫减损,表达力反而增强许多。
高分版
With the help of the ever rapid development of internet technology, online shopping is
coming into fashion in most of cities.
Online shopping is welcomed by most people due to various reasons. From the perspective
of consumer, it can save some time for people who don't have much spare time. Just click the
mouse, they can get whatever they want while staying at home. For the retailers, it can cut some
costs for those who don't have much circulating funds. They don't have to rent a house and spend
money on employees compared with the traditional trade mode. However, there are still some
defects in online shopping. First, lace of face to face deal makes online shopping less reliable
and trustworthy. Second, people will lose the fun of bargain.
It is undeniable that shopping on the internet has become an irresistible trend in modern
society. It's of great urgency that we need to regulate the relative laws accordance with the rapid
growth of online shopping. Only in this way can we enjoy the pleasure and convenience of
online shopping without the concern of being treated.
点评:
本次四级作文探讨的是最近的热点话题之一——互联网网购。目前网购的风靡程度
是众所周知,因此,考生对于该话题还是比较熟悉的。但是,比较特殊的是,题干所列
出的要求的是考生从一个客观的角度来阐述该话题,而不是简单陈述自己的意见。所以,
考生应当审清楚题,在写作时不仅仅要列出网购的优点,还必须给出相应的缺点。
按照四级作文的要求,考生在第一段时应该总述现象并引出话题;
第二段考生应当从正反两方面来论述网购,分别铺陈其优缺点;关于优点,网购的
优点很多,考生可择其最突出显著的方面来阐述,比如说网购可以节省很多时间;网购
可以节省很多成本开支等;其次,缺点方面考生可以把重心放在诚信方面;为了不至于
跟优点相比,缺点方面太轻,考生可以考虑稍微提一下其他缺点,比如说与传统购物相
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